Dance of Dreams
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Glen Josselsohn
I
danced
Skipping
through
Slippers
of dreams
Filet
of scene
Seasoned
Slipping
Only
occasionally
into
consciousness of a sort
Before
some other
Filet
stole awareness
and condensed it
For
a while
I
line them up.
Pendants
hung
With
care,
Dreamscapes
Awash.
Just beautiful, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteI agree, a lovely dreamscape to dance away to ~
ReplyDeleteAn excellent dance of words.
ReplyDeletesmooth flow audrey...cool use of filet both times...love the pic as well....dream on...
ReplyDeleteI love it, especially the "slippers of dreams" and "Dreamscapes awash."
ReplyDeleteThe long "e's" here sound perfect together:
ReplyDelete"Slippers of dreams
Filet of scene"
I really, really enjoyed the second appearance of the word "filet" as well. It opened up a world of sentient segments.
Your words dance from the beginning to the end:-))
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful Audrey!
ReplyDeleteAudrey, refreshingly original, and a whirl of a good read! Loved this, and the image was charming, too... Thanks, hon! Amy
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That final stanza especially is a perfect pairing to Josselsohn's work! Nicely done Audrey. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely. You have achieved a delicate balance of words, structure and theme.
ReplyDeleteI needed a little poetic beauty this morning and you provided it. Thank you, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteA beautiful dance, indeed!
ReplyDeleteThere's such a lightness of touch here-it complements the subject so well :)
ReplyDeleteserene flow of words...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteMany thanks for your words of appreciation on my writing ..keep visiting
This makes me want to get up and dance with joy. Hehe. Love it!
ReplyDeleteIt's really a dance of a dream, smooth flowing throughout! Nicely Audrey!
ReplyDeleteHank
Skipping through
ReplyDeleteSlippers of dreams...nice allits...and cool flow as well...dreamy and musical...dance on...dance on...
This is beautiful ... dreamy !!!
ReplyDeletewas good to see you today audrey...smiles.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteLovely poem, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteThis is so musical, Audrey... love the filet metaphor. I hear Outback calling out to my hubby for a Valentine's date now...
ReplyDelete'slippers of dreams'... oh how lovely!
ReplyDeleteLovely dancing language. K.
ReplyDeleteHi Audrey, what a pretty poem, and photo art.
ReplyDeleteI have a blog named "Dances of Dreams"!
Hi Audrey, what a pretty poem, and photo art.
ReplyDeleteI have a blog named "Dances of Dreams"!
Lovely.
ReplyDeleteAudrey, you always make me think. I love that about your poetry.
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