A Whispered Moment
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The Veil, Fernand Khnopff
I
move through days
Of
limned frost,
of
silent rain.
Piecing
moments of coherence
through
the whispered voice
and
a sharpened pencil;
making
my sense
by
leaving my mark.
Each
poem
a little-used corner
of
life—
Mine,
or another’s—
And as
I do so,
I
see myself
on the
periphery,
a veil
between us.
Perhaps
it must be so
for the
whispered voice
to
come in advance of life’s to-do list
So difficult to work around life's to-do list. This is a beautiful way of describing it, Audrey. k.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karin--
Deletethere will always be more to do you know...and sometimes where we want to be seems so out of reach...nice verse audrey
ReplyDeleteHey Brian--thanks!
Deleteany time....smiles...happy tuesday!
DeleteOh, yes, poetry before the have-to-do stuff of life. It's like the difference between dinner and dessert. Loved this, Audrey.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I have large chunks when that just can't happen--but I love it when it does!
DeleteEach little poem...I love that line. Reading this makes me want to write a poem about poetry. Now!
ReplyDeleteThank you Victoria!
DeleteThere are so many things that need to be done... a long to-do list.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful verses. A lovely read indeed!
My to do list always seems to get in the way--sigh--and thank you!
Deleteaha! your consciousness is awake and you can hear it!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem indeed :)
Thank you Ruchira--so good to see you here!
DeleteStunning Audrey wow!
ReplyDeleteThis is so very lovely. You have made a chore - a meditation.
ReplyDeleteI always smile when I read your poetry...it is wistful and thought-provoking and....enjoyable.
ReplyDeleteLovely work, Audrey!
Brilliant!!
ReplyDeleteHi Kathy! Thank you!
DeleteBrilliant!!
ReplyDeleteAnother magnificent poet's poem.... Well done...
ReplyDeleteThanks John! Loved your piece as well!
Deleteah - life’s to-do list can be a beast - not easy to find time sometimes to jot down the verses whispered in a silent voice... but we def. have to take the time - otherwise they may be lost forever..
ReplyDeleteOh I so agree!
DeleteI think we all do that.. create those little poems before the essential stuff... (or non - essential) Carpe Diem Cras
ReplyDeleteI think poetry must be near the top of a person's to-do list, something that is not put on 'life's back burner.' Poetry deserves an important place.
ReplyDeleteTo-Do list.
ReplyDeleteElderly lady "of class" talking recently in a 7 AM "recovery" meeting:
Topic hovered around procrastination.
Sophisticated Lady blurted out,
"MY BUCKET LIST
HAS BECOME MY
FU**-IT LIST!"
123 ex-drunks laughed for many seconds.m
Steve this cracked me up!
DeleteTo-Do list.
ReplyDeleteElderly lady "of class" talking recently in a 7 AM "recovery" meeting:
Topic hovered around procrastination.
Sophisticated Lady blurted out,
"MY BUCKET LIST
HAS BECOME MY
FU**-IT LIST!"
123 ex-drunks laughed for many seconds.m
Oh, I love this:
ReplyDelete"for the whispered voice
to come in advance of life’s to-do list"
Life's to-do lists are deadening...
I like "a little used corner of life." I imagine it fold over (dog eared style) and written in the margins.
ReplyDeleteLove this Audrey! Often writing comes last but definitely shouldn't. Can't think of how many lines I thought of while doing something else and lost them when I finally sat down to write.
ReplyDeleteAbout the little corner, from the periphery ... useful feeling of veil as it helps us forget the lists and shoulds waiting and hear the whispers calling. Very fine.
ReplyDeleteI like the phrase a whispered voice as it seems the voice as hardest to find at times..but when found the list may turn into daydreams instead of pens...
ReplyDeleteSeeing oneself on the periphery-- such an apt description of the feeling-- and yet, it is so necessary for the craft. Once the magic of the periphery is discovered, it becomes a haven. ~jason
ReplyDeletebeautiful write... loved "making my sense by leaving my mark." smiles
ReplyDeleteOh that dratted to do list.......but thankfully the poems are persistent!
ReplyDeleteThis is what inspired my poem for OLN. Thanks, Audrey.
ReplyDeleteI love this part as it speaks to me:
ReplyDeleteEach poem
a little-used corner
of life—
Yes, exactly what heaven said, that phrase just made me smile. I love this poem. Those whispered voices are the veils we view life through.
ReplyDeleteThe veil between them is haunting... Breathtaking poem, Audrey.
ReplyDeletePiercing, yet muffled and veiled at the same time...Skillful! ~jackie~
ReplyDeleteA great poem ! I love it.
ReplyDeleteThi is beautiful. I think we can all relate to those whispers. The muse speaks so softly sometimes. There are some great lines in this. Good writing.
ReplyDeleteYes, Beautiful! ..love "limned frost"
ReplyDeleteliked the concluding 3 lines especially ~ M
ReplyDeletethe urges and insights of writing too often suppressed by the activities of life..like the poem
ReplyDeletePiecing moments of coherence through the whispered voice and a sharpened pencil... I relate to your poem very closely. Well written.
ReplyDelete`Each poem
ReplyDeletea little-used corner
of life—
love this!
reflections of our life indeed are present in poems that we write:)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteHow did I miss this one in my feedly? Dang...glad you came by! Fantastic write Audrey. Love the lines so many have quoted and your close. Wonderful, wonderful work!
ReplyDeletelovely, atmosperic, soft and hushed
ReplyDeletethis is wonderful, Audrey. You create a subtle and believable atmosphere. so well done.
ReplyDeleteOh, the veils...this is gorgeous, Audrey. There's a aura of mystery in this...but that is how it should be when something is veiled, right? Needless to say, I loved it.
ReplyDelete"making my sense
ReplyDeleteby leaving my mark."
Yes.
This is so lovely:
ReplyDelete"I move through days
Of limned frost,
of silent rain."
A lovely title for a poem about poetry!
ReplyDelete"Each poem
a little-used corner
of life—
Mine, or another’s"
Sweet lines!
Beautiful and so thought-provoking. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteI can definitely relate to your lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteWe do want to leave our mark - and yet we want to not wreck what's there! It's all so difficult. A lovely poem. k.
ReplyDeleteOH! MY! GOD! I just emailed you a SECOND ago on this very topic - the inner voice and inclining our heads enough to hear it. That is FREAKY! GREAT wisdom in this poem.
ReplyDeleteheya.....good to see you are back...
ReplyDeletesmiles.
Beautifully crafted poem, Audrey. I do think we have to listen to that whispered voice whenever we hear it.....
ReplyDeleteSeems like something is always interfering with that "to do list"; sometimes to our regret and sometimes our relief. lol
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