Monday, January 9, 2012

Aching

He lay down amidst grasses so tall
they hide his eyes from his soul.
He lay among the ants
captivated by his Herculean hair,
curls creating bridges
oily black and lustrous.
He lay down
his weighted frame
burying tender shoots below.
Aching--
He traced the paths of wren and jay
their cawing jarring muscle from frame.
Aching--
and wondered when the rain
would claim him
the water submerge his heart.
Aching, aching
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copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012 

http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/15/open-link-night-week-27/ 

25 comments:

  1. nice...the grass hiding his eyes from his soul and the laying among ants..and the rain claiming him...mysterious..nice..

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  2. It is pretty mysterious. I love how the grass hides his soul and he is Herculean to the ants.
    A really lovely read. Welcome back to blog land :)

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    1. Thank you! Between the holidays and singing stuff--I feel a bit out of the loop--

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  3. oh such surrender in your words

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    1. Thank you Laura! I just today realized that I could reply! How long have I been doing this??

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  4. a lovely write of a solitary contemplative time ....one of yearning thank you x x

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    1. Thank you Kez for the read--much appreciated!

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  5. Your poem portrays such sadness in the end, though at the first line it seemed but restfull. Peace, Linda

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    1. I think there is a lot of sadness in it Linda--thank you!

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  6. This is a very beautiful write!

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  7. Couldn't tell where this was going, but I loved the trip! Thanks!

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  8. Some beautiful lines in this ..... enjoyed as always Audrey

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    1. Thanks A--nice to read you again as well--

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  9. Nice form ...I felt the aching all the way to the end ~

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    1. Thank you so much for the read--greatly appreciated!

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    1. this has a depth of feeling...not just in the aching but built by the description of posture and condition in the opening lines...really well done...

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    2. Thank you Brian--this was a fun write for me-

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  11. Lying there wating for the rain to wash his pain away, can truly see it, nicely done.

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  12. When the rain would claim him... " liked it and could relate to the pain. Beautiful.

    Shashi

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
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    1. Thank you so much Shashi! I hope you are doing well--

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