Aching
He
lay down amidst grasses so tall
they
hide his eyes from his soul.
He
lay among the ants
captivated
by his Herculean hair,
curls
creating bridges
oily
black and lustrous.
He
lay down
his
weighted frame
burying
tender shoots below.
Aching--
He
traced the paths of wren and jay
their
cawing jarring muscle from frame.
Aching--
and
wondered when the rain
would
claim him
the
water submerge his heart.
Aching,
aching
a
c
h
i
n
g
copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012
http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/15/open-link-night-week-27/
http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/15/open-link-night-week-27/
nice...the grass hiding his eyes from his soul and the laying among ants..and the rain claiming him...mysterious..nice..
ReplyDeleteThank you for the read Claudia!
DeleteIt is pretty mysterious. I love how the grass hides his soul and he is Herculean to the ants.
ReplyDeleteA really lovely read. Welcome back to blog land :)
Thank you! Between the holidays and singing stuff--I feel a bit out of the loop--
Deleteoh such surrender in your words
ReplyDeleteThank you Laura! I just today realized that I could reply! How long have I been doing this??
Deletea lovely write of a solitary contemplative time ....one of yearning thank you x x
ReplyDeleteThank you Kez for the read--much appreciated!
DeleteYour poem portrays such sadness in the end, though at the first line it seemed but restfull. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteI think there is a lot of sadness in it Linda--thank you!
DeleteThis is a very beautiful write!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary!
DeleteCouldn't tell where this was going, but I loved the trip! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteHope that is a good thing!
DeleteSome beautiful lines in this ..... enjoyed as always Audrey
ReplyDeleteThanks A--nice to read you again as well--
DeleteNice form ...I felt the aching all the way to the end ~
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for the read--greatly appreciated!
DeleteBeautiful poem!
ReplyDeletethis has a depth of feeling...not just in the aching but built by the description of posture and condition in the opening lines...really well done...
DeleteThank you Brian--this was a fun write for me-
DeleteLying there wating for the rain to wash his pain away, can truly see it, nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Pat!
DeleteWhen the rain would claim him... " liked it and could relate to the pain. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteShashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2012/01/whispers-haiku-on-how-i-write-poetry.html
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Thank you so much Shashi! I hope you are doing well--
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