Wednesday, April 3, 2013

A Bit of Sorrow



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Jeno Csuk
Hanging Out Laundry
In the public domain in the U.S.



a bit of sorrow
hung out on the line to dry
conversant with the language of the wind
both fleeting

their conversation
though muted
fills the current
with the colors of leaves
dazzled by the sun’s long kiss

i would listen
if I understood
the wind’s refrain
but I know the sorrow
it was I who pinned it there


copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2013

posted for Real Toads

33 comments:

  1. Oh, such a beautiful writing. Bittersweet and poignant. I love it!

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  2. Delicate and wistful. Such a lovely combination of the fluttering garments and the wind, whether sorrowful or not.

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  3. Ooh! This is lovely. On who understands the sorrow of the wind...

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  4. I like this one; it has a very Wilburesque (Love Calls Us To The Things Of This World) feel.

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  5. oh Audrey... so beautifully haunting.

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  6. Interesting mix of metaphor. Sharing your sorrow with the wind is a cool concept. Your poem has also helped me to imagine it opposite to [if I may play]:

    A bit of joy
    hung to share with the wind
    ....
    both fleeting and full!

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  7. Really an excellent response to the prompt, and an excellent poem on its own ground. Especially enjoyed the closing stanza.

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  8. Beautiful, Audrey, a perfect gem of a poem.
    K

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  9. very nice audrey...i like the use of wash hung out in this as the metaphor...i like the smell of the wind and spring in the sheets...smiles...that last stanza in particular brings the feeling for me...

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  10. What gorgeous work! I adore this.

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  11. Oh how lovely! This is honed to perfection.

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  12. wow.. such beautiful, fragile melancholy.

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  13. I like how you you drew all of your images and ideas together. Poems need endings. Well crafted!

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  14. Oh so wonderful and such beautiful words. I loved it and now look forward to many more.
    Take care
    Eddy.

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  15. I call that sweet melancholy, Audrey! I remember my mother talking to neighbors while they hung their laundry on the line...great memories, the sign of great writing.

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  16. Awesome, awesome words and lovely imagery. A bit of sorrow...a feeling with which all of us are familiar. :)

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  17. Fabulous - the final stanza especially so.

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  18. I love this whole metaphor. It is a beauty of a poem with an amazing beginning and end!

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  19. I always enjoy reading your words

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  20. Your poetry speaks to me. I have to read and reread.

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  21. Love it! Many people find themselves sad yet do not see they are the ones who put their own selves there... Love the lines!

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  22. I really love this, so sorrowful and wistful, and the ending is just perfect.

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  23. Love each and every line of this poem, beautiful!

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  24. Just wanted to say that I stop in often, anxious for a wonderful new poem. :) Thank you, too, for your sweet comments over at my blog - always. ;)

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  25. You have an inspiring blog Audrey. Looking forward to read more :)

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