Sunday, January 12, 2014

A Mid-Life Two Step




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Thomas Cole
in the public domain in the United States





The moon dances

     in step

with  the silver

     of star light’s reflection caught

in the light of you

  as we detail our tensions

in muscles long fraught—



Each one a road

posted and marked


No trespassing.


Not so long ago

the moon’s door

stood ajar,

its darkness, an invitation

   to excess.

copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2014


posted for Poet's United

34 comments:

  1. beautiful imagery.. interesting metaphors.

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  2. Seconding what Natasa says. The moon definitely is inspiring.

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  3. the contrast between the open and closed areas of life...of our tensions...and the play of th emoon in all of it...nicely done audrey

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  4. I love the metaphor of the moon and relationships, once close but now distant. Beautiful imagery, Audrey :)

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  5. "its darkness, an invitation / to excess." - great line, Audrey! I like how you used the moon in your poem.

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  6. I like this very much...I like how it spoke to so much of our human longings and conditions.

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  7. Classic and romantic in a two-step like the moon and starlight, the tense muscles now and the excess then.....so fine.

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  8. This is very beautiful, Audrey. I always love moon poems!

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  9. excellent images that makes this come alive, the moon, the starlight.

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  10. Seeing the moon come to fullness, I admire its dancing, an invitation I would like to accept ~

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  11. Hi Audrey, I think this is your best for a while - precisely phrased and measured - intensely poetic... For example:

    "we detail our tensions

    in muscles long fraught"

    And, as you must have known when you first wrote it - how perfectly crisp and true is:

    "the moon’s door

    stood ajar,

    its darkness, an invitation

    to excess."

    A real pleasure to read - thank you... With Best Wishes Scott

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  12. The moon dances

    in step

    with the silver

    of star light’s reflection caught

    in the light of you

    this poem stole my heart with that line. such fluid, detailed writing!

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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  13. moon is evergreen and is known as a healer by holistic people around.
    You captured it beautifully :)

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  14. Audrey,

    Living life's excesses seems a little less often these days!! Agility and all else make changes to life we cannot always control...We can but try, when the notion takes us:)
    Eileen

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  15. Oooo, Audrey, this reeks of the mystical and the magical. Just beautiful. I love the moon and the secrets she keeps.

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  16. It's good to see how the moon's light or shadows play with human emotions in different ways. One can go to excesses when the big stick is not a deterrent! Wonderful write Audrey!

    Hank

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  17. Oh...very nice! Such sensual, evocative words.

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  18. Love "the moon's door stood ajar, an invitation..." Beautifully vivid imagery filled with emotions,

    Elizabeth

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  19. Like moon relations too have their highs and lows, but love and care takes it all to be fine.

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  20. I loved the lines "the moon’s door stood ajar, its darkness, an invitation to excess." Beautiful imagery involved.... :)

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  21. Excellent abstract poetry which displays emotions we can all relate to.

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  22. ...an invitation---such is the perfect word to associate with the many possibilities that could happen below the moon... i enjoyed it, thanks!
    smiles...

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  23. Wow! You are getting better my friend and you were already very good.

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  24. Loved this. I know the steps to this dance very well. Lovely imagery and your words make magic.

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  25. The contrast really got me thinking, which I always think a good sign.
    Thanks
    Pea

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  26. This is super sensual, Audrey - very well done. k.

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  27. Well, everyone else said it. Beautiful.

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