A Mid-Life Two Step
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Thomas Cole
in the public domain in the United States
The
moon dances
in step
with
the silver
of star light’s reflection caught
in the
light of you
as we detail our tensions
in muscles
long fraught—
Each
one a road
posted
and marked
No trespassing.
Not so
long ago
the moon’s door
stood
ajar,
its darkness,
an invitation
to excess.
copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2014
posted for Poet's United
beautiful imagery.. interesting metaphors.
ReplyDeleteThank you Natasa
DeleteSeconding what Natasa says. The moon definitely is inspiring.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary!
Deletethe contrast between the open and closed areas of life...of our tensions...and the play of th emoon in all of it...nicely done audrey
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! Thanks and happy Sunday!
Delete"its darkness, an invitation / to excess." - great line, Audrey! I like how you used the moon in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI like this very much...I like how it spoke to so much of our human longings and conditions.
ReplyDeleteClassic and romantic in a two-step like the moon and starlight, the tense muscles now and the excess then.....so fine.
ReplyDeleteThis is very beautiful, Audrey. I always love moon poems!
ReplyDeleteexcellent images that makes this come alive, the moon, the starlight.
ReplyDeleteSeeing the moon come to fullness, I admire its dancing, an invitation I would like to accept ~
ReplyDeleteHi Audrey, I think this is your best for a while - precisely phrased and measured - intensely poetic... For example:
ReplyDelete"we detail our tensions
in muscles long fraught"
And, as you must have known when you first wrote it - how perfectly crisp and true is:
"the moon’s door
stood ajar,
its darkness, an invitation
to excess."
A real pleasure to read - thank you... With Best Wishes Scott
Thank you Loredana!
ReplyDeleteThe moon dances
ReplyDeletein step
with the silver
of star light’s reflection caught
in the light of you
this poem stole my heart with that line. such fluid, detailed writing!
stacy lynn mar
http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/
moon is evergreen and is known as a healer by holistic people around.
ReplyDeleteYou captured it beautifully :)
Audrey,
ReplyDeleteLiving life's excesses seems a little less often these days!! Agility and all else make changes to life we cannot always control...We can but try, when the notion takes us:)
Eileen
Oooo, Audrey, this reeks of the mystical and the magical. Just beautiful. I love the moon and the secrets she keeps.
ReplyDeleteIt's good to see how the moon's light or shadows play with human emotions in different ways. One can go to excesses when the big stick is not a deterrent! Wonderful write Audrey!
ReplyDeleteHank
Oh...very nice! Such sensual, evocative words.
ReplyDeleteLove "the moon's door stood ajar, an invitation..." Beautifully vivid imagery filled with emotions,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Like moon relations too have their highs and lows, but love and care takes it all to be fine.
ReplyDeletelovely pen, Audrey ~
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery in this. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteI loved the lines "the moon’s door stood ajar, its darkness, an invitation to excess." Beautiful imagery involved.... :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent abstract poetry which displays emotions we can all relate to.
ReplyDelete...an invitation---such is the perfect word to associate with the many possibilities that could happen below the moon... i enjoyed it, thanks!
ReplyDeletesmiles...
Wow! You are getting better my friend and you were already very good.
ReplyDeleteLoved this. I know the steps to this dance very well. Lovely imagery and your words make magic.
ReplyDeletebeautifully penned :)
ReplyDeleteThe contrast really got me thinking, which I always think a good sign.
ReplyDeleteThanks
Pea
This is super sensual, Audrey - very well done. k.
ReplyDeleteWell, everyone else said it. Beautiful.
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