Tuesday, February 28, 2012

Painful Storms

Storm bristles in
with tears sliced into silver points.
I wander empty rooms
and collect them
in a jar specially marked,
place them on a shelf
where the sun
can warm their points,
blunting their pain.
I want to say that will be enough,
but loneliness
can create
more jars than I have room,
and the sun shines little
when storms gather.


copyright/All rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012

16 comments:

  1. so many lovely threads here Audrey...I love this one "with tears sliced into silver points" and this "loneliness
    can create
    more jars than I have room" exquisitely written, heart breaking beauty.

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    1. Thank you Laura! I so appreciate the read and comments--enjoy the rest of the pub

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  2. Oh, how loneliness can make us feel.
    This is so lovely on many levels, and, heart felt too.
    Beautiful piece.

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    1. Thank you so much for the read Bren--and thank you for suggesting that I come to the pub--I have really enjoyed being here--

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  3. This was so delicate and vulnerable. I loved it.

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  4. What a marvelously original way to express the pain of loneliness.

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  5. more jars than i have room, like a metaphor for someone who hoards pain

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    1. Could be--although I don't think I originally thought of it that way--but certainly that view works

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  6. the imagery here is so poignant and heart-wrenching...
    beautiful.

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    1. Thank you so much for the read---as I look at this one more--I like it more

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  7. So sadly beautiful and charming. I feel this. Great write!!

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  8. The jars are the unique image in this poem, and I can see them clearly, like marmalade jars with every hue of sadness another shade of orange in the light.

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    1. You are such a wonderful poet, even your comment feels poetic! Thank you!

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