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Shakespeare's Bar Fly




Sweetened and tuned
by silvered honey glint
of such tender eye,
by well-meaning scorn
and bitterest herb,
you gall
the unknowing--
the least desirous of us.
Hold fast to your deceit
and play that card again
in a blue smoke bar,
when humor deserts
and the line of truth
is drawn in the sand
by the angel who saves.
It won’t be today
my friend
no, not today.


copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012


http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/15/open-link-night-week-32/ 
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  1. (mymoonlog)February 19, 2012 at 6:16 AM

    Great idea this blog, i like
    Please join my blog Thanks so much

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  2. ClaudiaFebruary 21, 2012 at 2:51 PM

    ha nice..enjoyed esp. the second part here...the line of truth
    is drawn in the sand...nice...

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  3. DaydreamerFebruary 21, 2012 at 3:22 PM

    Ooo...sounds like this person was (wait for the dreadful pun intended) a bad card.... LOL
    Nice piece of writing Audrey :)

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2012 at 3:37 PM

    a liner with a punch...that was interesting! :)

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  5. Brian MillerFebruary 21, 2012 at 4:54 PM

    there is nice wisdom in your words...and we can only dare the angels for so long...to each one the day comes...

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  6. Laurie KolpFebruary 21, 2012 at 5:32 PM

    You tell them... and stick with your guns, I can tell you will.

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  7. ScarletFebruary 21, 2012 at 6:22 PM

    My fav lines are:

    line of truth
    is drawn in the sand
    by the angel who saves.

    Great to see you at D'verse ~

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  8. wayside word gardenFebruary 21, 2012 at 7:21 PM

    Love the line of truth in the sand... interesting connection with Shakespeare....

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  9. Pat HattFebruary 21, 2012 at 7:22 PM

    Looks like their hand has been dealt and they went bust..haha.. wise words indeed.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 21, 2012 at 7:28 PM

      Hi Pat--not sure about the wisdom part--but I enjoyed writing this one--

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  10. zongrikFebruary 21, 2012 at 8:33 PM

    i like the metaphor play that card again.

    three dancer senryu

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  11. SemaphoreFebruary 21, 2012 at 8:57 PM

    Effective technique, inhabiting a medieval voice, with all its florid anachronisms, to underline a theme both modern and timeless.

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  12. UnknownFebruary 22, 2012 at 3:28 AM

    We all play with the cards dealt to us ...think this is ace ! thank you for a fab share x

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 22, 2012 at 8:36 AM

      Thank you Kez--very much appreciate the read and comment--enjoy your day!

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  13. UnknownFebruary 22, 2012 at 6:20 AM

    well positioned piece, enjoyed the lead in trio. ~ Rose

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  14. Rachel HoytFebruary 22, 2012 at 6:58 AM

    Brilliant words! I know someone I'd like to read this to... but not today. Not today. :)

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  15. UnknownFebruary 22, 2012 at 9:47 AM

    delightful opening here, the honey-glint is a great image and the notion of well meant scorn, I tend to like the way that sounds and what it could represent. The piece flows wonderfully, leading to a stop-like moment, when you end the piece so well. Great job. Thanks

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  16. Beth WinterFebruary 22, 2012 at 10:17 AM

    The voice has Shakespearean tones to it and the message is age old. Drawing the line is my favorite part. What a great infusion of ages.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 22, 2012 at 3:32 PM

      Thank you for stopping by and reading it Beth--I was hoping mixes the styles would work!

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  17. Christi MoonFebruary 22, 2012 at 12:21 PM

    Hello Audrey--

    I really enjoyed this piece. In particular these two lines really stand out for me--

    Hold fast to your deceit
    and play that card again

    love the resolve of the narrator in the end. well done! -- C.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 22, 2012 at 3:32 PM

      Thank you Christi! I really enjoy your work and feel honored!

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  18. ayalaFebruary 22, 2012 at 4:36 PM

    Nice write...love these lines...and the line of truth
    is drawn in the sand
    by the angel who saves.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 22, 2012 at 5:56 PM

      Thank you so much ayala!

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    2. AnonymousFebruary 22, 2012 at 6:18 PM

      Wow. I like the bitterest herb in Shakespeare's Bar Fly and no not today. Someone is recognized...and caught. Good.

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  19. kd sullivanFebruary 23, 2012 at 6:17 AM

    No, it won't be today. I like that. Drawing lines of boundary.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 23, 2012 at 1:41 PM

      Thank you so much for the read and comments--It is always helpful to hear from others after they read a piece--to see what strikes someone and what does not--hopefully that will help me keep growing as a poet!

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  20. Sharp Little PencilFebruary 23, 2012 at 8:26 AM

    Love this combination of Shakespeare and the all-too-common tale of the travails of bar hopping. The "silvered honey glint" really struck me... took me right back. Great write, Audrey! Peace, Amy

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  21. Janice @ Mommy's LoungeFebruary 23, 2012 at 3:15 PM

    Lines of truth drawn in the sand.... very poetic indeed! And it makes anyone scared to cross that line. =)

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerFebruary 23, 2012 at 4:02 PM

      Thank you so much for the read and comments--greatly appreciated--I like lines of truth myself--

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  22. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2012 at 7:42 AM

    Loved this! Potently reaching and well written, a joy to read!
    Poppy

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  23. UnknownApril 8, 2012 at 11:26 AM

    Ow wow - you've done it again Audrey. You've set my heart rate at 160. I need to lie down! I shared this on Face book too.

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  24. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerApril 9, 2012 at 3:04 PM

    Aw thank you again Sheila!!

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  25. Justin W PriceMay 24, 2012 at 12:59 PM

    Nice work, Audrey. Well put, as always!

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