Friday, February 17, 2012

Shakespeare's Bar Fly




Sweetened and tuned
by silvered honey glint
of such tender eye,
by well-meaning scorn
and bitterest herb,
you gall
the unknowing--
the least desirous of us.
Hold fast to your deceit
and play that card again
in a blue smoke bar,
when humor deserts
and the line of truth
is drawn in the sand
by the angel who saves.
It won’t be today
my friend
no, not today.


copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012


http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/15/open-link-night-week-32/ 

49 comments:

  1. Great idea this blog, i like
    Please join my blog Thanks so much

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  2. ha nice..enjoyed esp. the second part here...the line of truth
    is drawn in the sand...nice...

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  3. Ooo...sounds like this person was (wait for the dreadful pun intended) a bad card.... LOL
    Nice piece of writing Audrey :)

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  4. a liner with a punch...that was interesting! :)

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  5. there is nice wisdom in your words...and we can only dare the angels for so long...to each one the day comes...

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  6. You tell them... and stick with your guns, I can tell you will.

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  7. My fav lines are:

    line of truth
    is drawn in the sand
    by the angel who saves.

    Great to see you at D'verse ~

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  8. Love the line of truth in the sand... interesting connection with Shakespeare....

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  9. Looks like their hand has been dealt and they went bust..haha.. wise words indeed.

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    1. Hi Pat--not sure about the wisdom part--but I enjoyed writing this one--

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  10. Effective technique, inhabiting a medieval voice, with all its florid anachronisms, to underline a theme both modern and timeless.

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  11. We all play with the cards dealt to us ...think this is ace ! thank you for a fab share x

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    1. Thank you Kez--very much appreciate the read and comment--enjoy your day!

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  12. well positioned piece, enjoyed the lead in trio. ~ Rose

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  13. Brilliant words! I know someone I'd like to read this to... but not today. Not today. :)

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  14. delightful opening here, the honey-glint is a great image and the notion of well meant scorn, I tend to like the way that sounds and what it could represent. The piece flows wonderfully, leading to a stop-like moment, when you end the piece so well. Great job. Thanks

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  15. The voice has Shakespearean tones to it and the message is age old. Drawing the line is my favorite part. What a great infusion of ages.

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    1. Thank you for stopping by and reading it Beth--I was hoping mixes the styles would work!

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  16. Hello Audrey--

    I really enjoyed this piece. In particular these two lines really stand out for me--

    Hold fast to your deceit
    and play that card again

    love the resolve of the narrator in the end. well done! -- C.

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    1. Thank you Christi! I really enjoy your work and feel honored!

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  17. Nice write...love these lines...and the line of truth
    is drawn in the sand
    by the angel who saves.

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    1. Wow. I like the bitterest herb in Shakespeare's Bar Fly and no not today. Someone is recognized...and caught. Good.

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  18. No, it won't be today. I like that. Drawing lines of boundary.

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    1. Thank you so much for the read and comments--It is always helpful to hear from others after they read a piece--to see what strikes someone and what does not--hopefully that will help me keep growing as a poet!

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  19. Love this combination of Shakespeare and the all-too-common tale of the travails of bar hopping. The "silvered honey glint" really struck me... took me right back. Great write, Audrey! Peace, Amy

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  20. Lines of truth drawn in the sand.... very poetic indeed! And it makes anyone scared to cross that line. =)

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    1. Thank you so much for the read and comments--greatly appreciated--I like lines of truth myself--

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  21. Loved this! Potently reaching and well written, a joy to read!
    Poppy

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  22. Ow wow - you've done it again Audrey. You've set my heart rate at 160. I need to lie down! I shared this on Face book too.

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  23. Nice work, Audrey. Well put, as always!

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