Saturday, July 13, 2013

A Penance of Color



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An image made with Apophysis.TheScurvyEye 23:28, 8 January 2006




Fluttering crimson, pale against winter white

A tattering, misted by wind

Wave before her eyes

Bending light.


Around her folded heart

She perceives a moment of tear-filled sight

As Pleasure’s company now departs

Amidst waltzing leaves


Shivering in jackets

Of gold and brown,

Buttons ajar in the light.

She wears her heart


Like a badge,

Emblazoned in heedless embroidered

Flowerettes,

Blooming red

In a field of white.




copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2013

Me playing with form--yikes


posted for Poets United

33 comments:

  1. we have to be careful wearing our heart...people dont always care for it when they can see it...smiles. lovely imagery, esp toward the end...

    i am a form idiot, so what form?

    do love the title on this audrey

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    1. Thanks Brian--I am also a form idiot--so II don't know if it has a name--
      the rhyme of the a line keeps returning one line later each time--

      so

      a
      b
      c
      d

      e
      a
      f
      g

      h
      i
      a
      j etc

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    2. ah, interesting...a nice open loop...

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  2. I used to wear my heart on my sleeve...until I made the mistake of wiping my nose on it once.

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  3. wearing the heart like a badge in a changing season... oy...we have to be careful of the robbers along the way... i like the images you use audrey

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  4. Poetically and colorfully wonderful.

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  5. This is a wonderful synthesis of poem and art.

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  6. I'm getting ready for a day road trip, so I have to run, but I wanted to get my touch of beauty this morning before leaving. You provided it and I thank you.

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  7. I love the form you used, Audrey. Sometimes it IS nice to stretch oneself and try something different. In this poem I am especially struck by the wonderful use of colors, which reminds me how MUCH colors add to poetry. The second stanza is sad -- someone leaving who will be very much missed!

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  8. Timo's comment made me cackle.......love the poem and admire the form, Audrey. Intriguing write.

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  9. The heart is essential to life in more ways than one. Great write.

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  10. Love the style and artistic flow of this, beautiful!

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  11. It takes great courage to wear one's heart in the sleeve ~ Intriguing form dear ~ Happy weekend from BC, smiles ~

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  12. heartfelt. loved the images, and I didn't even noticed it was written in a form :) I'm such a free verse poet. I admire those who can write in form.

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  13. fits with Bastille Day - today
    love the flow Audrey and the feel of pride even in her sanguinous pain

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  14. thank you for sharing - beautiful poem!

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  15. ooh I felt the urge to tell her to be careful! Love your use of color Audrey.

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  16. a poem of exquisite delicateness and vivid colours.

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  17. You picked great image to go with your poetry, always!

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  18. forms can be very interesting to write. though i favour free verse, i like to write some form poetry now and then. i liked the images in your poem, and your use of colours in it, :)

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  19. Your piece is written with much passion connected to the idea of red on white.

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  20. Audrey, exquisite!
    Well done.

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  21. "She wears her heart like a badge" and other images leave me breathless... Lovely poem, Audrey!

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  22. "Shivering in jackets

    Of gold and brown,

    Buttons ajar in the light.

    She wears her heart"

    Love the imagery Audrey!

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  23. Wearing our hearts like a badge takes true courage so the red is so appropriate.

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  24. I think it's enviable to wear out hearts where others might not only see them, but touch them. This was beautiful.

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  25. There is something especially wonderful about the idea of fall with buttons - buttons ajar -- this worked very well with the heart as a badge. Thanks much. Karin--(Manicddaily.wordpress.) k.

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