A Penance of Color
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Fluttering
crimson, pale against winter white
A
tattering, misted by wind
Wave
before her eyes
Bending
light.
Around
her folded heart
She
perceives a moment of tear-filled sight
As Pleasure’s
company now departs
Amidst
waltzing leaves
Shivering
in jackets
Of
gold and brown,
Buttons
ajar in the light.
She
wears her heart
Like
a badge,
Emblazoned
in heedless embroidered
Flowerettes,
Blooming
red
In a
field of white.
we have to be careful wearing our heart...people dont always care for it when they can see it...smiles. lovely imagery, esp toward the end...
ReplyDeletei am a form idiot, so what form?
do love the title on this audrey
Thanks Brian--I am also a form idiot--so II don't know if it has a name--
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ah, interesting...a nice open loop...
DeleteI used to wear my heart on my sleeve...until I made the mistake of wiping my nose on it once.
ReplyDeleteYou made me laugh!!
Deletewearing the heart like a badge in a changing season... oy...we have to be careful of the robbers along the way... i like the images you use audrey
ReplyDeleteThank you Claudia!
DeletePoetically and colorfully wonderful.
ReplyDeleteRasma---thank you so much!
DeleteThis is a wonderful synthesis of poem and art.
ReplyDeleteThank you Liz--I am glad you enjoyed the two
DeleteI'm getting ready for a day road trip, so I have to run, but I wanted to get my touch of beauty this morning before leaving. You provided it and I thank you.
ReplyDeleteHey Bill--Thank you and enjoy your day!!
DeleteI love the form you used, Audrey. Sometimes it IS nice to stretch oneself and try something different. In this poem I am especially struck by the wonderful use of colors, which reminds me how MUCH colors add to poetry. The second stanza is sad -- someone leaving who will be very much missed!
ReplyDeleteTimo's comment made me cackle.......love the poem and admire the form, Audrey. Intriguing write.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry--Timo made me cackle as well!!
DeleteThe heart is essential to life in more ways than one. Great write.
ReplyDeleteLove the style and artistic flow of this, beautiful!
ReplyDeleteIt takes great courage to wear one's heart in the sleeve ~ Intriguing form dear ~ Happy weekend from BC, smiles ~
ReplyDeleteheartfelt. loved the images, and I didn't even noticed it was written in a form :) I'm such a free verse poet. I admire those who can write in form.
ReplyDeletefits with Bastille Day - today
ReplyDeletelove the flow Audrey and the feel of pride even in her sanguinous pain
thank you for sharing - beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteooh I felt the urge to tell her to be careful! Love your use of color Audrey.
ReplyDeletea poem of exquisite delicateness and vivid colours.
ReplyDeleteYou picked great image to go with your poetry, always!
ReplyDeleteforms can be very interesting to write. though i favour free verse, i like to write some form poetry now and then. i liked the images in your poem, and your use of colours in it, :)
ReplyDeleteYour piece is written with much passion connected to the idea of red on white.
ReplyDeleteAudrey, exquisite!
ReplyDeleteWell done.
"She wears her heart like a badge" and other images leave me breathless... Lovely poem, Audrey!
ReplyDelete"Shivering in jackets
ReplyDeleteOf gold and brown,
Buttons ajar in the light.
She wears her heart"
Love the imagery Audrey!
Wearing our hearts like a badge takes true courage so the red is so appropriate.
ReplyDeleteI think it's enviable to wear out hearts where others might not only see them, but touch them. This was beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThere is something especially wonderful about the idea of fall with buttons - buttons ajar -- this worked very well with the heart as a badge. Thanks much. Karin--(Manicddaily.wordpress.) k.
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