The Weight of Water
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Summertime by Mary Cassatt
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I close my eyes
to feel its softness
like a cool cloth
pressing gently
upon the orbital ridge around my eyes,
the weight
at once present and absent
from lid's creases.
If I open my mouth
it will invade every crevice
available to it,
a potent reminder of its press,
a heft upon
the slim cord of air
trapped between my teeth
as i float
up to the surface.
copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2014
part of the comfort of water is how it does fill every pore and wraps us in a hug complete...of course we cant get too comfortable or it will swallow us...i wonder did you read mrs mediocrity today...some interesting parallels...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian--I just went to read her--and yes--you are right!
DeleteBeautiful <3
ReplyDeleteHa, we really are on the same page! Must be something in the air... :)
ReplyDeleteHaving said that, I love the feel of this, it's very visceral, offering the sensation of being there...really beautiful!
I love this ode to the elusiveness of water. It really makes me want to pin it down too. I love the image of your open mouth and it finding any and all crevices.
ReplyDeleteIn water it feels like in sky.
ReplyDeleteWow. Very vivid. Love the imagery. :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed what you did with this ekphrasis, Audrey, how you allowed us to experience the senses involved.
ReplyDeleteCalgon take me away!
ReplyDeleteone of the essential element of survival...beautifully penned down, Audrey!
ReplyDeleteHappy Valentine, my friend!
water, like air
ReplyDeletewith a weight indeed
alive, fluid, essential
Lovely poetic illustration of a beautiful painting!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing, Audrey! This poem gives me a relaxing feeling as I read....
ReplyDeleteThe power of water ~ I specially like this: a potent reminder of its press ~
ReplyDeleteLovely words here Audrey ~ Happy Hearts Day ~
I closed my eyes and pondered the weight of water on my eyes, like a washcloth. You are right! That sensation is aptly described here!
ReplyDeleteVery tactile and evocative. So glad I stopped in to enjoy this poem, nice work Audrey!
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