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I got this up fairly late yesterday and thought i would let it carry over for today--

Thank you for reading


Sick Woman, 1665, by Jan Steen

Lady of my heart
you pale in morning's moment
as chore and turn has 
ended flux 
and morning's freshness
moves toward the bleached
head of blushes
unknown two moons past

you herald morning's kiss
as quickly as I herald its passing
how now to move
with child heavy within you
and time's ticking
an end to young love


copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012

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  1. Far Beyond The RidgeOctober 7, 2012 at 8:59 PM

    I really liked how it paused and turned on "unknown two moons past"
    Your style matched the portrait perfectly and it's easy to believe the painting was done for your words, rather than vice versa
    ~rick

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  2. BerowneOctober 8, 2012 at 2:39 AM

    A very interesting take on this week's prompt.

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  3. CadOctober 8, 2012 at 3:56 AM

    A real case of the baby blues?! :)

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  4. Yvonne OsborneOctober 8, 2012 at 4:11 AM

    Ah, you saw her as heavy with child and I saw it a bit differently. And time ticking....

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  5. Susan LindquistOctober 8, 2012 at 7:07 AM

    Oh! I hadn't even thought of a poor young woman passing in childbirth ... very good!

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  6. Stafford RayOctober 8, 2012 at 12:18 PM

    Yes, the passing of young love as reality bites. However, most of us morph into something more sustainable as a different but more satisfying role.
    Thanks for joining. I am honoured.

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  7. AnonymousOctober 8, 2012 at 12:56 PM

    Oh my, that ending is so sad.

    I love this part:
    "you pale in morning's moment
    as chore and turn has
    ended flux"

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 8, 2012 at 1:10 PM

    "and time's ticking, an end to young love." Beautiful interpretation of the painting.

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  9. GraceOctober 8, 2012 at 1:49 PM

    The ending lines are particularly heart breaking ~

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerOctober 9, 2012 at 1:41 PM

      Hi Grace---they are I suppose---sometimes I am surprised at what comes out when I sit down to write a piece

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  10. Madeleine Begun KaneOctober 8, 2012 at 2:30 PM

    Lovely verse!

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  11. MarianOctober 8, 2012 at 5:23 PM

    Wow! Tells such a story in a few words! Very powerful!

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  12. CynthiaOctober 8, 2012 at 6:35 PM

    Beautiful words to go with a beautiful image and painting. Lovely!

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  13. Laurie KolpOctober 8, 2012 at 7:33 PM

    I love the classic voice in this.

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  14. ScottlBOctober 8, 2012 at 8:05 PM

    goes well with the painting very good.

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  15. AnonymousOctober 8, 2012 at 8:52 PM

    Very eloquent. Twisted tale. Great take on the prompt.

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  16. my heart's love songsOctober 8, 2012 at 11:35 PM

    a beautiful take on the prompt!

    ♥

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerOctober 13, 2012 at 8:54 AM

      Thank you so much for reading and commenting my heartslovesongs!! So appreciated!

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  17. MaryOctober 9, 2012 at 5:15 AM

    Well penned. Ah yes, being with child definitely changes the form of 'young love.'

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  18. Melanie ChisnallOctober 9, 2012 at 5:18 AM

    Lovely poem that transports you back in time :)

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  19. Ruchira KhannaOctober 9, 2012 at 9:59 AM

    Audrey,
    The picture is beautiful and the words are electrifying.

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerOctober 14, 2012 at 7:25 PM

      Ah Ruchira, thank you!

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    2. Ruchira KhannaMarch 5, 2016 at 7:19 AM

      I thought so...I had read this poem before :)
      Such electrifying are your words, Audrey
      xoxo

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  20. Little NellOctober 9, 2012 at 10:14 AM

    I've read this several times and it gets better with each reading as there are so many meanings to draw from it.

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  21. Kay L. DaviesOctober 9, 2012 at 2:35 PM

    A very different take on the prompt picture, Audrey. Well done!
    K

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  22. MargaretOctober 9, 2012 at 8:28 PM

    ....an end to young love. Very interesting thought to ponder. Yes, children do change things...

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    1. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerOctober 18, 2012 at 12:35 PM

      Thank you Margaret! I so appreciate tour read and kind words!

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  23. Janine BolléeOctober 10, 2012 at 4:20 AM

    Is she or isn't she?
    that is the question.
    Like your work combinations
    some with mystery behind them.

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  24. KayOctober 10, 2012 at 11:45 AM

    love the moon reference..lovely...x

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  25. kaykualaOctober 11, 2012 at 3:47 AM

    with child heavy within you
    and time's ticking

    A young woman about to go to labor! Interesting! At least there's a sympathetic voice at hand. Nicely Audrey!

    Hank

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  26. RavenOctober 12, 2012 at 8:14 AM

    The poem is lovely, sweet and gentle. The painting at the top of the page is extraordinary.! Thank you for stopping by my blog Audrey.

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  27. AnonymousOctober 12, 2012 at 6:29 PM

    And possibly and end to life at that time. I did one for this picture too. I like your take very much. Thanks much. K.

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  28. Brian MillerOctober 12, 2012 at 6:56 PM

    morning's freshness
    moves toward the bleached
    head of blushes...nice...and you herald mornings kisses as i herald its passing....some very cool lines in this audrey...

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  29. UnknownOctober 13, 2012 at 7:53 AM

    I've been reading lots of Alfred, Lord Tennyson and William Wordsworth this week. Your cadence, treatment of subject matter and construction fits in beautifully with the work of those two greats. Nicely done!

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  30. Christy BOctober 13, 2012 at 2:56 PM

    The line "you herald morning's kiss" is my fave line here!

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  31. DaydreamertooOctober 15, 2012 at 2:57 AM

    Ahhh..... being pregnant, I never thought of that. Love the language you've used. Very much of the earlier 'times'

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  32. BarbaraOctober 15, 2012 at 8:09 PM

    Gorgeous take on the painting! I love how you captured the language of the era! Nicely done.

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  33. SusanOctober 16, 2012 at 7:59 AM

    Completely unified, completely powerful and moving and loving. I am in awe. And I will be back a lot! Thank you for visiting my blog!

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  34. ayalaOctober 16, 2012 at 5:20 PM

    Lovely write, Audrey. Thank you for your kind words. xo

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  35. Sharp Little PencilOctober 16, 2012 at 11:24 PM

    Audrey, this was an inspired interpretation of the portrait. "An end to young love," indeed. Ironically, mine is on the same theme but very contemporary, you read it. We must have been dancing on different covers of the same book?

    I won't be in town for a couple of weeks, going to CA, but I'll be back around Halloween! See you then... Peace, Amy

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  36. Nithya VenkatApril 2, 2014 at 7:26 PM

    Beautifully expressed, great poem.

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  37. HeidiApril 30, 2014 at 10:43 PM

    I like the storytelling, although I think I interpreted the story in an unintended way. At the end I thought he was leaving her because she got pregnant. The above comments seem like maybe he is more worried about her or their relationship. Either way, it's a cool write

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