A Whisper of Rhythm
Wkikipedia commons
Monet
Verger en fleur
in the public domain in the United States
platitudes
fill cracks
splintered
by spiked
hooks
filled with
tedium
mixed
days
respite
a
voluntary ceasing
blooming through
wrapping
old thoughts
in
new linens
starched
in
nature’s scent
laid
to rest here
dusty grave of words
unused
decimated
by pretentiousness
to
seep into earth
a
recycling
to whisper anew
their
rhythms
upon eyes glassed
(a
mirror)
once
again
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Posted for the Toads Open Link Monday
Audrey, I must say that this Rhythm is so melodious and sweet.
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Thank you Ruchira!
DeleteI like the idea of words seeping into earth again ~ Lovely work Audrey ~
ReplyDeleteThank you Grace---
Deletei like the thought behind this audrey...taking the old thoughts and laying them to rest so that they might find new life and grow once more....pretty cool...smiles.
ReplyDeleteHi Brian! Thanks!
DeleteBeautiful poem as always and so poignant. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Cyndi! Hope all is well in your creative world!!!
DeleteI especially like the first stanza and the ending: "their rhythms upon eyes glassed (a mirror) once again" Really strong writing. I enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jasmine!
DeleteI like your last stanza,
ReplyDelete"a recycling
to whisper anew
their rhythms
upon eyes glassed
(a mirror)
once again"
Especially the mention of the mirror
Thank you Listening Daisy! I so much appreciate your comment!
DeleteYeowch. This feels like a terrible kind of trough - easy enough to get into - I do anyway. Great if you can find the whisper anew. (You do seem to find it.) Let the old words decimated by pretentiousness seep! k.
ReplyDeleteI like the cyclical feeling of this...it is that way with this craft...I think, there's always a wave anew.
ReplyDeleteI like this:
"wrapping
old thoughts
in new linens
starched
in nature’s scent"
Great poem Audrey!! Thank you so much for your visit!
I especially loved the same stanza Hannah chose...very lovely........
ReplyDeleteI liked the visual of "my" old thoughts being wrapped in new linens.
ReplyDeleteI am with so many here, like Hannah, the idea of old thoughts wrapped in new linens. The opposite of putting new wine into old wineskins... and the fresh scent of new linen, bound to freshen anything it touches... thanks so much for visiting me and commenting, too! Amy
ReplyDeletehttp://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/01/13/the-journey-trifecta/
beautifully written!
ReplyDelete♥
I like how you played with placement in this poem.
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of wrapping old thoughts in new linens, Audrey! Enjoyed your poem very much.
ReplyDeleteI strongly believe that there is a rhythm to life, an ebb and flow to all actions around us....this is a beautiful piece of writing.
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem.the way the falling leaves come alive with their rhythm in your lines is just amazing.
ReplyDeleteYou've poetically shared what I aim for in my work, which is to recreate the ordinary into something fresh and new. The ultimate in upcycling! Well penned, Audrey.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/14/in-three/
Love this... That first stanza really grabbed me, and you just kept drawing me down to that fabulous close!
ReplyDeleteI love the first stanza...but the whole thing is delightful.
ReplyDeleteWell done... great imagery
ReplyDeleteMy favourite part of this poem:
ReplyDelete"wrapping
old thoughts
in new linens
starched
in nature’s scent"
Wow. I've missed your poems, sorry I haven't been over here in a while. Will be changing that! :)