Monday, January 14, 2013

A Whisper of Rhythm




Wkikipedia commons
Monet
Verger en fleur
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platitudes
     fill cracks
splintered
     by spiked
hooks
     filled with
tedium

mixed days
     respite
a voluntary ceasing
     blooming through

wrapping
     old thoughts
in new linens
     starched
in nature’s scent

laid to rest here
     dusty grave of words
unused
decimated
     by pretentiousness
to seep into earth

a recycling
     to whisper anew
their rhythms
     upon eyes glassed
(a mirror)

once again



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Posted for the Toads Open Link Monday

27 comments:

  1. Audrey, I must say that this Rhythm is so melodious and sweet.

    Sharing it on google +

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  2. I like the idea of words seeping into earth again ~ Lovely work Audrey ~

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  3. i like the thought behind this audrey...taking the old thoughts and laying them to rest so that they might find new life and grow once more....pretty cool...smiles.

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  4. Beautiful poem as always and so poignant. :)

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    1. Thanks Cyndi! Hope all is well in your creative world!!!

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  5. I especially like the first stanza and the ending: "their rhythms upon eyes glassed (a mirror) once again" Really strong writing. I enjoyed it.

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  6. I like your last stanza,

    "a recycling
    to whisper anew
    their rhythms
    upon eyes glassed
    (a mirror)

    once again"

    Especially the mention of the mirror

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    1. Thank you Listening Daisy! I so much appreciate your comment!

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  7. Yeowch. This feels like a terrible kind of trough - easy enough to get into - I do anyway. Great if you can find the whisper anew. (You do seem to find it.) Let the old words decimated by pretentiousness seep! k.

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  8. I like the cyclical feeling of this...it is that way with this craft...I think, there's always a wave anew.

    I like this:

    "wrapping
    old thoughts
    in new linens
    starched
    in nature’s scent"

    Great poem Audrey!! Thank you so much for your visit!

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  9. I especially loved the same stanza Hannah chose...very lovely........

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  10. I liked the visual of "my" old thoughts being wrapped in new linens.

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  11. I am with so many here, like Hannah, the idea of old thoughts wrapped in new linens. The opposite of putting new wine into old wineskins... and the fresh scent of new linen, bound to freshen anything it touches... thanks so much for visiting me and commenting, too! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/01/13/the-journey-trifecta/

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  12. I like how you played with placement in this poem.

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  13. I love the idea of wrapping old thoughts in new linens, Audrey! Enjoyed your poem very much.

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  14. I strongly believe that there is a rhythm to life, an ebb and flow to all actions around us....this is a beautiful piece of writing.

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  15. beautiful poem.the way the falling leaves come alive with their rhythm in your lines is just amazing.

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  16. You've poetically shared what I aim for in my work, which is to recreate the ordinary into something fresh and new. The ultimate in upcycling! Well penned, Audrey.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/14/in-three/

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  17. Love this... That first stanza really grabbed me, and you just kept drawing me down to that fabulous close!

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  18. I love the first stanza...but the whole thing is delightful.

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  19. My favourite part of this poem:

    "wrapping
    old thoughts
    in new linens
    starched
    in nature’s scent"

    Wow. I've missed your poems, sorry I haven't been over here in a while. Will be changing that! :)

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